The Best Personal Statement I’ve Ever Read

March 3, 2011
Jesse R. Borges PhD

The law school application process is certainly not easy to navigate. After the LSAT, applicants are often most challenged while tackling their personal statement. This month, our team of Admissions Consultants at Kaplan will share with you their insights on what makes for the best personal statements in our March series – “The Best Personal Statement I’ve Ever Read.” Want the team to help you with yours? Check out our personal statement review package and get unlimited access to any of our top consultants.

As my colleagues at Kaplan Graduate Admissions Consulting will tell you, terrible personal statements are about a dime a dozen. As a result, law school admissions officers see too darned many of them. That’s just one of the reasons why a good personal statement can help your application to stand out, and a great one can sometimes turn what would have otherwise been a certain rejection into an offer of admission. As you might imagine, the great statements tend to stick in a reader’s memory for a long time. In fact, I can still vividly recall the best one that I’ve ever read.

The essay told an epic tale about a student who struggled to achieve passing grades – moving on and off of academic probation, and through a myriad of stops, shifts, and re-starts, from one college to another – for the better part of a decade following his graduation from high school. For a time, it appeared that he was destined to be a college drop-out. To make matters worse, as the student floundered academically, he bounced around from one retail job to another. Then, one day, he took a position as a grassroots worker on a local political campaign. He quickly realized that he had found something that he loved to do, but just as importantly, he was very good at it. His life soon changed in dramatic ways. He almost immediately became a star local operative for a major political party, and in a very short time period worked his way up and into state-wide and national campaigns. His confidence ultimately inspired his academic career. He transferred any grades that he could (i.e., not the bad ones) to a new university, changed his major to political science, and revamped his study habits. For his final two years of college credit (which were required to attain a degree from the institution to which he had transferred), he aced nearly every course that he took and set his sights on a career in law.

As compelling as the above storyline is, it is important to always keep in mind that an outstanding story counts for little without an effective organizational structure and proper literary execution. Toward that end, the applicant in this case sought to engage the reader by presenting a scene in the opening paragraph which depicted one of the happiest moments of his life – his triumphant college graduation. It was as he moved toward the end of the first paragraph and into the second that he added the engaging twist which showed that his academic success story was far from the norm: it had been ten years (and many failures) in the making. Most importantly, the applicant did not harp on the lengthy, negative period in his life that I described above. Rather, he took a straightforward and succinct approach in recounting the great challenges that had stymied him for so many years. From there, it was off to the heart of the essay – how the applicant overcame his struggle and succeeded, ultimately setting a clear and direct course for law school along the way.

Finally, in the concluding paragraph of the essay, the applicant brought the reader full circle – back to the opening story. There he was, still standing at graduation, but instead of thinking simply about his past and how he had made it to this point, he was now looking toward the future and thinking about how he was fully prepared to conquer the challenges that lay ahead in law school and beyond.

I will never forget the excitement that this applicant felt when he received three acceptance letters from top law schools over three consecutive days. One of these letters came with a handwritten note from a law school dean who praised him for doing such an outstanding job on the personal statement. I should mention that this applicant ultimately ended up declining each of those three offers in favor of an offer from one of the most renowned and oldest law schools in the United States (a school which I will not mention by name here in order to maintain the client’s anonymity). While these successful results certainly help to keep this applicant’s memory in my mind, it is the personal statement that he wrote which most stirs my recollection.

Like many of my colleagues, I’ve advised on thousands of application essays over the years and been a part of success stories that are far too numerous to mention, but this was one of my most special cases because it showed not only how an applicant can overcome years of struggle, but also how in two double-spaced pages, he can demonstrate his success in a powerful way.

Every once in a while, somewhere out there, a law school applicant does something in the application process that can be described as a real game changer. The personal statement that this particular applicant wrote would probably best be described as a life changer.

Jesse R. Borges PhD

Jesse R. Borges PhD During the past 20+ years, including 15 with Kaplan, where I serve as Senior Admissions Consultant & Trainer, I’ve personally advised more than 1,500 graduate school applicants, and helped my clients gain admission to nearly every ABA-approved Law School in the United States. My expertise covers not only admission to law school, but also business, public policy, international affairs and social science programs. I have a PhD from Princeton University, and have previously been honored as Kaplan Graduate Admissions Consultant of the Year, as well as as National Consultant of the Year. When I’m not working with clients at Kaplan, I’m running The MBA Admissions Center, which is my MBA admissions consulting practice. You can find my complete bio at

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